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LazyPint's Avatar
Posted by: LazyPint
2008-03-12 15:48:25
Close to Perfect
Overall:
90
 
 
 
 
 
I thought this was excellent, apart from the use of "cuz" which sounds a bit boy-bandish and where you put "no" instead of "not", which was obviously a mistake (unless you're Scottish!).

I also didn't like the stanza with "pissed" in it. It's a bit harsh for what is otherwise a very gentle, uplifting poem.

Aside from these (minor) faults, this is a tremendous piece of work
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