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Sistine's Avatar
Posted by: Sistine
2008-04-01 13:31:09
Oooooh! Fanciful!
Overall:
90
 
 
 
 
 
This, I like. It gives a powerful representation of a once-proud, noble spirit being brought to shambles by Number One, great job. Plenty of two0faced imagery, too, if you look deep enough.
Tri-Nitro-Toluene's Avatar
Posted by: Tri-Nitro-Toluene
2007-04-16 13:17:07
Too possessive
Overall:
85
 
 
 
 
 
I don't know why but the constant use of the word my annoyed me for some reason. I think it's because I don't think a Lion would be so self centred. They are pack animals after all, so I think the whole being concerned with himself is not fitting.

The poem itself was decent, and I enjoyed reading it apart from the above problem.

You've done a good job on this poem Smile Kudos to you.
Michael Danton's Avatar
Posted by: Michael Danton
2007-04-16 13:01:03
Dramatic.
Overall:
85
 
 
 
 
 
I found this to be a very dramatic piece, that would strongly favor a live recital. When I was reading it, I couldn't quite picture a lion as such, but more of an anthropomorphic pantomime lion as I don't believe Lions in zoos feel that way about their enclosures. Like big cats, I think they appreciate the easy life and use the opportunity to loll about in the sun, play with the pride and get fed every few days.

I digress, personally I thought the feelings within were a bit consistent for my liking and really needed some contrasting emotion to really bring it out. I also thought the ending was overly morbid when it needn't have been. Perhaps something like now I roar in defiance, for soon I will be free.
It sort of has a double meaning to it, and it appeals to both optimists and pessimists.

Great score for a great poem, welcome to Fourth Perspective.

M.
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