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Sistine's Avatar
Posted by: Sistine
2008-01-27 07:50:14
New Death
Overall:
87
Concept: 18
Characters: 18
Dialogue: 17
Presentation: 18
Plot: 16
An enjoyable read. It puts a new, rather unexpected spin on the classic concept of death and it's workings. Despite my likening to the more classic incarnations of Death, this certainly pleased a unny bone here and there. great job.
LazyPint's Avatar
Posted by: LazyPint
2008-01-24 15:55:51
Pretty Witty
Overall:
86
Concept: 18
Characters: 18
Dialogue: 17
Presentation: 18
Plot: 15
I really enjoyed this one. Nothing like the weary civil servant trying to get through a long day's work... even if that work involves dead people...

Nice characters, no real flaws I can think of.
Rhizy's Avatar
Posted by: Rhizy
2007-12-15 19:34:25
Interesting. Really good.
Overall:
82
Concept: 18
Characters: 18
Dialogue: 15
Presentation: 18
Plot: 13
I liked it. I thought Death was awesome. Never thought of this concept quite like this before. Good job.
Pianoabuser's Avatar
Posted by: Pianoabuser
2007-07-17 02:01:05
Made me chuckle.
Overall:
90
Concept: 18
Characters: 18
Dialogue: 18
Presentation: 18
Plot: 18
A very witty story, at the very least. Reminded me a lot of Terry Pratchett - have you ever read any of his stuff.

Aside from that, not much to say. Good work.
system6660's Avatar
Posted by: system6660
2007-05-31 08:28:11
333
Overall:
77
Concept: 11
Characters: 20
Dialogue: 12
Presentation: 20
Plot: 14
I LIKE THE REAPER it seemed personal.
LEVELInGUP's Avatar
Posted by: LEVELInGUP
2007-05-11 06:53:50
dejavu
Overall:
100
Concept: 20
Characters: 20
Dialogue: 20
Presentation: 20
Plot: 20
i loved that. i think you should make your death character a novel or chapters...i liek death so much.
Ish's Avatar
Posted by: Ish
2007-04-07 01:09:06
I Fear the Reaper
Overall:
95
Concept: 20
Characters: 19
Dialogue: 16
Presentation: 20
Plot: 20
that was one of the funnyest stories i have ever read.

i think every one asks themselves what happens after death and you tugging at that part of our views did some good for you. i think the presintation went well and the humer was exelent. i didnt quite get the thing about that one guy that was supose to be dead but still was being written in the book but the story was great!
laroneM.'s Avatar
Posted by: laroneM.
2007-03-27 15:20:10
A DIFFERENT VIEW
Overall:
85
Concept: 15
Characters: 18
Dialogue: 18
Presentation: 18
Plot: 16
A different view

This was a totally enjoyable read. I am not the greatest writer in the world however, this story will be reread by me. Thank you for writing it. Laronem.
dsingleton's Avatar
Posted by: dsingleton
2007-03-20 19:25:42
A great read.
Overall:
81
Concept: 16
Characters: 16
Dialogue: 18
Presentation: 17
Plot: 14
I throughly enjoyed reading this short story, and I'm sure I will come back and read it again. Many of my points have been covered by the other reviewers, so I won't just sit here and re-iterate what they have already said.

I like the characters, Death especially seemed to have a nice description about him and his workplace, and the use of the workplace (stationary and all) gave a new feel to that particular character, who, as you said has been used many times over.

I honestly don't think that anything more could be done with this piece, and it has been finished off nicely.

Congrats.
Zerok's Avatar
Posted by: Zerok
2007-03-11 06:29:58
Like a Skittle.
Overall:
86
Concept: 15
Characters: 17
Dialogue: 20
Presentation: 18
Plot: 16
And by that, I mean it was short and sweet.

The concept is a bit overdone, but you still managed to make it fun. You could easily guess who the guy behind the the desk was, even without reading your production notes, but I guess that's really not the point of the story.

I liked the characters. Gareth had some depth to him, but what I really felt was the Reaper. From the few details you provided, I got a feel for his whole tired, dutiful persona. Especially the pen-putting down part.

The dialogue was virtually flawless.

The plot was fun, while fairly straightforward and relatively unconclusive. Buddy dies, with a slight twist, meets death. Very modern-style. Very vanilla. But vanilla is still tasty.

Good work man.
Michael Danton's Avatar
Posted by: Michael Danton
2007-03-10 06:04:14
Take a number.
Overall:
89
Concept: 15
Characters: 19
Dialogue: 19
Presentation: 19
Plot: 17
How do we begin to figure the mysteries of the great beyond? I digress, this is not an exercise in theology but a writing critique!

The concept was a little well worn but still better than average. The plot wasn't a watertight conclusion and the fact this fellow we know nothing about being sent to hell is a bit rough.

Other than that, excellent!
L-C's Avatar
Posted by: L-C
2007-03-09 11:56:39
A Decent Short Story.
Overall:
55
Concept: 15
Characters: 10
Dialogue: 14
Presentation: 8
Plot: 8
It was an enjoyable story but it severly lacked a plot. This is forgiven due to the comical dialogue during the story. One problem I had was a couple of typos I noticed like a foward slash ("/") instead of a question mark ("?").

Besides that, it was an enjoyable read.
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