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When their lives end, their story begins.
In this episode of the new series "Ghost Town," we learn more about the events leading up to Kevin's death as the tenants begin to settle into their afterlives.
I extremely highly recommend reading Episode 1 before this one. Thanks a bunch for the positive reviews for that episode, let's hope they carry over onto this one!
Posted by: Michael Danton
Need to Know Basis.
When I first read the original episode I thought to myself that it was really throwing down the gauntlet for what could be a truly excellent series, although the characters and events were introduced at lightspeed, somehow you seemed to manage it with class and style.
This episode is no different; however although the same high quality of dialogue and fast pace is still there, the driving force behind the story which is the mystery has all but evaporated except for the sudden surprise addition of this "door" which is about to be explained away in the next episode so there's little point in dwelling on it.
I've made connections between this story and that of "Lost" this door almost runs a parallel with the bunker hatch in lost; however in the same way, if it was opened the moment they found it, there would be no mystery and the moment would also be ultimately anticlimactic.
The flashbacks are a nice touch too, surprising at times considering our hero is actually a villain. These techniques were also employed by "lost" not to answer questions as you've done, but to bring up even more questions. You've tried to establish a bit more mystery with the woman and the (child)? But I think the script is becoming far too blatant for it's own good and a good dose of subtlety should be employed as frequently as possible. Yet another balance you should be mindful of.
I think at this time though, the plot should be your highest concern. People have questions and they'll go crazy if they're not answered... This is good and bad as it makes a story rewarding, but if you have characters that say "I know what's going on but I'm not telling you" It makes it just as irritating for the character as it does for the reader. Taking a separate tack of not taking no for an answer or perhaps "It's important that you don't ask or try to find out for yourself" has a tremendous amount of mystery in itself.
All things considered, you've done a great job with the series so far and if you take the story a bit slower, focus on character development and employ a bit more subtlety, then I think it has a lot of potential.