Posted by: LazyPint
I thought this was excellent, apart from the use of "cuz" which sounds a bit boy-bandish and where you put "no" instead of "not", which was obviously a mistake (unless you're Scottish!).
I also didn't like the stanza with "pissed" in it. It's a bit harsh for what is otherwise a very gentle, uplifting poem.
Aside from these (minor) faults, this is a tremendous piece of work