Posted by: ah2981
Wow.... just wow!
This is the highest score iv ever givin anyone but i love it! theres only a few things i didnt like.
the second to last page you said
It was you who gnawed Mrs. Havers face down to the raw red BONE. Come… out to US, us, us.”
fresh corpse’s that’s what they want! “Fresh… CORPSES, corpses, corpses YES, yes, yes.” You
will never ever have me, never, never…
After bone and before Come there should be a " to match the otehr one. Thats something little and it really didnt take anything away, i just thought you shoukd know.
I was you would have discribed her more, her entries told alot about her but in the part of you writing to the man i wish you could have explaned what she looked like or something along thouse lines. It was somewhat slow but never lost my intrest.
I spent alot of time reading it and re-reading it becasue i tohught it was good and not extreamly scary but kind of bone chilling. Good work and dont ever stop writing.